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This is for my commission chart that i plan on making but it may be a while so i'm posting this before i forget about it
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:star::star::star::star-half::star-empty: Overall
:star::star::star::star::star-half: Vision
:star::star::star::star-empty::star-empty: Originality
:star::star::star::star-half::star-empty: Technique
:star::star::star::star::star-half: Impact

Agh, it's not easy for me to dish out 5 star ratings in art I critique, but this picture really deserves it!
Let's think about it real quick.
You drew an extremely dark, ominous, texture-rich environment better than most other artists I've seen on Deviantart do, realistically.
As if that wasn't awesome enough, you plastered a colorful cat into the scenario, which pops out in an already majestic environment!
You also drew Skycloud extremely cutely in this picture, with the amount of natural-seeming life in the positioning of your picture surpassing the levels of professionals such as Finchwing even!
A basic art tip is that an artist is supposed to make the positioning of characters look asymmetric yet still proportionate to add a natural, emotional sense of expression into an image, along with also increasing the range of understanding in proportions with artists.
You had perfectly contrasted the positioning of the body in this image to look natural, adorable, and like you put a lot of effort into this image.
The dirt textures are extremely Earthy and realistic, along with the grass looking ominous and beautiful. The shape of the rocks is also interesting and realistic, although are a bit too smooth like rubber.


Okay, now for the negatives of this art, because praise is awesome, but seeing what could change is important for growing the talent of an already professional artist. Sorry! <img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/a/a…" width="19" height="19" alt="^^;" data-embed-type="emoticon" data-embed-id="417" title="Sweating a little..."/>

The trees look too smooth, where trees are supposed to look more rough as if they had bark rather than stone. You aced the patterns of the trees, but the textures of the brush were too smooth and didn't exactly fit the theme of trees.

The rocks look extremely off in texture, despite their highly-skilled shading. There is a certain arc you have on the rocks which makes the rocks look too smooth. You had used the wrong brush size on texturing the edges of the rocks. You were going for a jagged yet smooth shape based off of the way you drew the rocks, but the textures of the rocks look off. The rocks and trees were the first flaws I noticed in this image due to their odd, out-of-theme textures. I admit: the trees and rocks would fit one of those WikiHow To Camp articles perfectly and look even better than what they had drew, but it doesn't fit how you shaded the picture in general and how you had drew the dirt. I'm predicting you spliced an image of a dirt texture into the dirt as opposed to drawing it yourself, but if that's the case, you should've done the rocks and trees similarly. I'm not saying this to be a dick, I'm just an extremely hard critic (yet terrible artist lmao).

The shading is nearly perfect, but it just feels... off. The sun is coming from the southwestish (according to my imaginary compass on Skycloud's head.) The shading kinda draws the shading as coming from the southwest in places, but coming from other positions on other objects. I'm awful at shading myself and don't know a thing about it, so I don't have much to critique here, but if somebody as awful at shading as I can see some inconsistency with shading, then there's probably some more.

Skycloud has a few errors on her as well. The most obvious ones are that her mouth seems to not only be in the wrong shape and positioned a bit off, but that the line fades randomly near her muzzle, with it needing to fade near her eye more if anything. Her eyelashes are also missing, and for a chibi-style female cat, those are essential. Don't let bacteria, bugs, glass, and dust get in her eyes due to forgetfulness! I mean, chibi cats don't have eyelids, so what else do they have against defending dust?! The anatomy looks great, but the position you made her jump off the stone looks kinda awkward. Let's say she's just standing next to the rock and has her body positioned from a Northeast to Southwest slope. The shading and depth wouldn't be right, and the paws would be orientated incorrectly. But based on the appearance of shading and depth, it appears you trying to make it appear like she has her legs in the air jumping off the rock. If she was jumping off of the rock, her butt should be a little bit higher at that position, or she should be a bit farther from the stone to retain the same booty leverage and velocity. Her stripes also seem too colored-in and not as if they were actually on her, where they would be more smooth if she was real, and the more "fuzzy part" would be inside the colored stripes, sticking out from the "color range". I feel the fur outside of the tail was also slightly inconsistent in parts, such as the brush feeling too flashy and dark. The tail might also be a little bit too thick, although not extremely too thick. Her thighs also appear off; there's a bit too much ass and not enough leg, unless you're trying to make Skycloud look thicc. The paws seem a bit too smooth. The outlines used with the brush look about a size too thick. Her eyes also lack a slight bit of necessary depth even for anime eyes, but shouldn't have too much more depth; I'm not an expert of eyes, but you should research cat eyes, anime eyes, and human eyes more and experiment with different styles. The purple outlines also appear off, and the one near the top of her booty appears slightly too long in the tail.

Also, this is kind of an unfair nitpick, but the Deviantart watermark looks tacky in this. You should try watermarking your art a different way, such as writing your username in the dirt and rocks, as it would be EXTREMELY hard for an artist to modify the rocks and dirt to match the natural look of the image while removing your username.


Synopsis:
Good, really good job on this photo! The incredible colring, shading, depth, creativity, cuteness, mixture of chibi and realism, and rather skilled anatomy of this image overpower most of the flaws I had mentioned, but some like the rocks, trees, and Skycloud's eyes are rather apparent in the image, although still don't equate to how much effort, positive qualities, and general greatness of this image.

Here's what I'll recommend you look into:
Leverage/Angles/Physics
Texturing For Bark
Texturing For Fur
Shading For Grass (Grass is long and split, so there needs to be shading inbetween the grass more somehow; make it appear more hollow and spread out rather than in bunches)
Shading For Rocks
Shading For Cats
The Direction Of Sunlight/Extra Shading Techniques (Some directions seem incorrect, and the tree near the northeast looks improperly shaded)
Orientation/Depth/Position Shading (Skycloud's second leg should be darker due to the positioning behind the first leg, placement in the sun, etc.)
Cat Anatomy (paws, jaws, fur, legs, and tail mostly)
Eye Styles of Cats, Humans, and Anime
Mouth Styles
Fur Texturing (Like colored stripes)
Ear Texturing (Her ears are a bit too smooth and curly; they need to be more jagged)
Color Theory (Skycloud's coloring is nice and so are the trees, but they should be colored a bit differently. The coloring seems a bit off. The rocks also look EXTREMELY off.)

OH GOD I'M SO SORRY IF I WAS TOO MEAN THROUGHOUT THIS! I JUST WAS TRYING TO GIVE YOU EVERY POINTER I COULD SO PLEASE DON'T HATE ME, YOUR ART IS STILL LIKE A MILLION TIMES BETTER THAN MINE, HONESTLY! YOU HAVE SO MUCH TALENT ALREADY, I'M JUST LIKE THE HARSHEST CRITIC EVER!